Wednesday, June 3, 2015

Around Pinehill senses writing SD

One frosty winter's morning I was sitting underneath a hoop.When in sight was a playground children happily play on like monkeys.I was strolling around, when I saw a little brown bird hopping around like a rabbit.I once again sit facing the sun and squint, like I'm facing my bedroom light.As I walk around to stretch my arms and legs I see a denuded tree that looked haunted and I also see a pink and white sock that is soaking wet!It's so pretty!
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  1. AnonymousJune 3, 2015 at 4:34 PM

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  2. AnonymousJune 3, 2015 at 4:35 PM

    I like how you did this :D
    when I saw a little brown bird hopping around like a rabbit.

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  3. AnonymousJune 3, 2015 at 4:57 PM

    I like this bit sarah
    when I saw a little brown bird hopping around like a rabbit.

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  4. AnonymousJune 3, 2015 at 5:12 PM

    Sarah, I really enjoy the language you've chosen, especially the phrase "I see a denuded tree that looked haunted".
    However, I think you've started too many sentences with the word "I". Can you think of any other ways to begin them?

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  5. AnonymousJune 4, 2015 at 4:47 PM

    Great job Sarah,
    I really like all your crazy ideas!

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