My card writing

Card 2

Rock climbing

I struggle to climb up the rocks like a dog trying to catch a cat up a tree, and every where I place my foot rocks fall.My mum calls out for me at the top of the mountain, I look up at her,I lose my balance and fall down but not too far.Unfortunately, I grazed my knee.Anyway, I started to climb again but very slowly like a sloth, and hopefully I don't fall down again.I keep hearing rocks falling behind me and the fierce wind pushing against me.I can also feel all the bumpy rocks while I'm climbing.I was almost at the top and then I could taste all the dust going into my mouth (yuck) and I can see the very top of the mountain.Every one was waiting for me and I could smell the picnic my mum was preparing, and the delicious chicken wings.I rush up the hill like a sprinting cheetah, and I finally get to the top of the mountain, and I was so hungry I could eat a a whole pig.I get to eat at last.YAY!!!.After that I was stuffed.THE END

Similes and metaphor

1. I struggle to climb up the rocks like a dog trying to catch a cat up a tree

2. Anyway, I started to climb again but very slowly like a sloth

3. I rush up the hill like a sprinting cheetah, and I finally get to the top of the mountain

4. I was so hungry I could eat a whole pig